Look at my poem and criticize.(or compliment)

[Tomak Ohara]

i have a poem. Please take it seriously and tell me what ya think.

Beautiful

She looks into my eyes, and I stare into hers. Her beautiful pools of jaded glass. I run my fingers through her long cinnamon hair. I touch her clean crimson lips with mine. I pull away from our embrace to look into her face. Her features make her as beautiful as the deep blue ocean itself. Her personality makes her truly unique to the mind and heart. Her touch as soft as a raindrop upon a flower. Her body fits the description of teardrop. Not one of sorrow and sadness, but one of happiness and rejoice. Lastly, her heart. Her heart that serves a man so well. Her heart that loves with such grace. Her beauty and her affection for another man shall wait. For I am not worthy of such treasures.

[Angelica Shin]

Beautiful.

*sniff*

I like it.

[Rognan Dar]

Not bad :)

[Angelica Shin]

Not as good as <a href=http://lilscrewup.diaryland.com>my poems</a> tho.


j/k...Tis a great one Tommy.

[Oriadin]

Pretty good
But doesnt a poem
Have to be layed out
In lines
Like this?

[Leeloo Mina]

That's good.. :)

And Usually poems are laid out like that.. but not always.

[Sene Unty]

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They dont have to make sense...it can look like this for example :D