Shameless Idea Theft: "Critique my Character"

[Captain Untouchable]

I'm gonna jump on the bandwagon with this, leeching the good idea that a bunch of you have had.

Over the last few days / weeks / however long it's been, there have been a few characters that I've really managed to get myself worked up and excited about writing; and I feel like the stuff I'm churning out is correspondingly good.

However, there are some characters where I feel I'm having to fight my way through posts, and where I feel that the end product isn't up to scratch.

I would be interested to see if your opinions on what is good and bad line up with what I'm thinking; and if there are any ways you think I could improve; things I might want to try differently; do that I don't; stop doing that I do; etc.

Are there any characters you would like to see more of? Any that you think are being underused, or think I could perhaps make better use of if I wrote them in a different way / in a different setting / etc? Are there any characters that just aren't working?

Also, it's been mentioned that my posts are "long"... which they are. I sometimes get carried away, and ramble a bit. Is that okay - are my epic installments worth the effort of reading through? - or are you all sitting there at your monitors groaning about the arduous task of trawling through yet another?

For reference, my characters are these (http://www.sw-fans.net/wiki/index.php?title=Template:Untouchable). Some of them are ones I haven't started using yet, though. :uhoh

[Sanya Tagge]

As you already said, I think we are the same in that we fall in and out of love with certain characters depending on our mods. Fortunately, you have such a huge array of characters that I think you are always 'in the groove' for at least one of them.

You do write long posts, which strangely has faded out of fashion over time at Fans, but I think you use very little fluff or filler. Often, you have great one-liners or turns of phrase in there that can break up a body of text in a way that you don't feel it's an effort to get through.

[Miranda Tarkin]

Yes I must say that you are the master of the one line/one shot zingers at times XD

[Kira Draykin]

I'm not going to critique your characters since I don't know allot of them to well. I will say this some of my favorite characters I have read of yours are Elias Akasha and Jaden Luka. I'm also look forward to seeing what Aiden Tahmores brings to the table for Shadow Squadron. Also looking forward to Atton Kira.

On a side note I like the name Mackenzie Tallen could just be ego do to the fact my name is Mackenzie though.

On your writing I like it when you do opening posts and it's where your longer posts shine the best. You are really great at setting up the scene where ever that maybe.

[Anbira Hicchoru]

Jaden Luka's definitely got the "right stuff" as far as feeling like a solid leader. You write him with a good bit of confidence, which is actually harder than it sounds. Had a lot of fun RPing alongside him.